From 04dd157847b721f1ce962ba87161aabd45fb5604 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Holden Rohrer Date: Mon, 12 Aug 2019 23:58:28 -0400 Subject: final edits --- jones-la/zinsser-essay.tex | 35 +++++++++++++++++------------------ 1 file changed, 17 insertions(+), 18 deletions(-) diff --git a/jones-la/zinsser-essay.tex b/jones-la/zinsser-essay.tex index 0253930..15820af 100644 --- a/jones-la/zinsser-essay.tex +++ b/jones-la/zinsser-essay.tex @@ -21,36 +21,35 @@ \header \title{{\fourteenit On Writing Well\/}'s Areas and My Style} -Writing is an intrinsically egotistical, self-centered act, but it's not done alone. ``At the heart of good nonfiction writing'' is a personal transaction, the writer's vulnerability to the reader \zincite{5}. ``Out of it come two of the most important qualities that this book will go in search of: humanity and warmth'' \zincite{5}. To present a warmer and more human style, I need to passively learn what good writing sounds like and actively learn what writing well feels like. %edit w.r.t. concerns in comments of next paragraph; also, very very bad transition +Writing is an intrinsically egotistical, self-centered act, but it's not done alone. ``At the heart of good nonfiction writing'' is a personal transaction, the writer's making him/herself vulnerable to the reader \zincite{5}. ``Out of it come two of the most important qualities that this book will go in search of: humanity and warmth'' \zincite{5}. To present a warmer and more human style, I need to passively learn what good writing sounds like and actively learn the problem-solving of writing. %edit w.r.t. concerns in comments of next paragraph; also, very very bad transition -To learn the writing process well, starting at the beginning is only natural. The lead, the introduction, the hook. All of these pose a difficult problem---how to convince the reader that what I'm writing is worth their time. %clunky -However, instead of a lead, I often simply summarise my paper because I'm ``too stiff'' to communicate any meaningful information without just using formulaic patterns \zincite{19}. But my writing style isn't all weak. In the middle, the most constant section of the drudgerous story's outline, my writing often does a good job of relying on the facts and reducing clutter \zincite{49}. %Weak or no thesis. Thesis should be "To present a ??warmer and more human?? style, I need to passively learn what good writing sounds like and actively learn what writing well ??feels?? like." -%%lead/conclusion (maybe use a different thing as lead) +The first problem is the beginning---how to start. As Zinsser teaches, a good lead is about compelling the reader to start and continue reading and nothing else. Of course, to present the ideas covered is necessary to keep their attention, but it isn't a primary goal. +However, instead of a lead, I often simply summarise my paper because I'm ``too stiff'' to communicate any meaningful information without just using formulaic patterns \zincite{19}. But my writing style isn't all weak. In the middle, the most constant section of the drudgerous story's outline, my writing often does a good job of relying on the facts and reducing clutter \zincite{49}. -Research is another strongsuit of mine. My capacity to generate information with the tools available to me is almost always larger than my need to use it. %tighten up -And that helps my writing because as I gather less information, the chance that I need to use an unfit fact, phrase, or quote skyrockets \zincite{46}. My ability to gather copious amounts of information %want to use quantity, or do I? +Research is another strongsuit of mine. I'm almost always able to gather more information than I can or need to use. +And that helps my writing because as I gather less information, the chance that I need to use an unfit fact, phrase, or quote skyrockets \zincite{46}. My ability, however, to generate a large quantity of information %want to use quantity, or do I? is outweighed by my weaker sense of quality---both of quotes or information and of writing. %research -By quality of writing, I don't mean my writing---I mean models for my writing. %``I'm not referring to?'' -In chapter 6, ``Words,'' Zinsser recommends to ``make a habit of reading what is being written today and what was written by earlier masters. Writing is learned by imitation'' \zincite{28} However, he makes a more difficult request than simply reading a lot---``cultivate the best models'' \zincite{28}. In certain cases, this can be easily discerned, like the breezy style chock-full of cliches denounced by Zinsser. %clean up -But it's not always that clear. A cliche or two can slip into a good writer's writing by accident. They are human, after all. So the presence of cliches couldn't possibly be the deciding factor. The frequency does play a part, but holistic analysis is necessary. Because magazines and newspapers' standards can be low, maybe best-sellers compose a good series of good writing \zincite{28}. This means I'd miss out on good magazine and newspaper articles, but to develop a stronger taste, it's not a terrible plan. This completely ignores my teachers, who probably have a better idea of what makes a good book than me. %good pivot point; also, is it too pandery or does ``probably'' weaken it too much? -To a degree, that is useful, but it's not enough---the number of books we read in class, and I am grateful for this (for a different reason), is too small to be of any large value in ``cultivating my models.'' My next question, after choosing what to read, is what to read {\twelveit for.} +By quality of writing, I don't mean my writing---I'm referring to models for my writing. +In chapter 6, ``Words,'' Zinsser recommends to ``make a habit of reading what is being written today and what was written by earlier masters. Writing is learned by imitation'' \zincite{28} However, he also makes a more difficult request---``cultivate the best models'' \zincite{28}. Sometimes it's easy to tell, like the breezy style full of clich\'es denounced by Zinsser. +But it's not always that clear. A clich\'e or two can slip into a good writer's writing by accident. They are human, after all. So the presence of clich\'es couldn't possibly be the deciding factor. The frequency does play a part, but holistic analysis is necessary. Because magazines and newspapers' standards can be low, maybe best-sellers compose a good series of good writing \zincite{28}. This means I'd miss out on good magazine and newspaper articles, but to develop a stronger taste, it's not a terrible plan. This completely ignores my teachers, who probably have a better idea of what makes a good book than me. %good pivot point; also, is it too pandery or does ``probably'' weaken it too much? +To a degree, that is useful, but it's not enough---the number of books we read in class, and I am grateful for this (for a different reason), is too small to be of any large value in ``cultivating my models.'' After choosing what to read, I have to ask, ``how can I read to my maximum benefit?'' %reading -Being that Zinsser describes the task in the chapter ``Words,'' I think reading and contemplating these authors would have one goal---the development of style: grammar, word use, sentence structure, cliche recognition (and removal), humor, and every other minor facet of style. But the idea of deliberately reading to develop style seems contradictory to his criticism of adding fake style and bald men wearing toupees. ``Trying to add style is like adding a toupee. At first glance the foremerly bald man looks young and even handsome. But at second glance---and with a toupee there’s always a second glance---he doesn’t look quite right'' \zincite{18}. %is the quotation necessary? -The only way to reconcile these two admonitions %find a better word -is to view it as a passive process. The only trouble is that passive processes are slower than active processes. This matches up perfectly with style not ``solidify[ing] for years as {\twelveit your} style, {\twelveit your} voice,'' despite being disappointing to my American ``I want it now'' spirit \zincite{23}. %should ``I want it now'' be in quotes or italicized? Use a better word than despite because that is not what I wanted to say. +Being that Zinsser describes the task in the chapter ``Words,'' I think reading and contemplating these authors would have one goal---the development of style: grammar, word use, sentence structure, clich\'e recognition (and removal), humor, and every other minor facet of style. But the idea of deliberately reading to develop style seems contradictory to his criticism of fake style \zincite{18}. +The only way to reconcile these two admonitions +is to view reading as a passive process. The only trouble is that passive processes are slower than active processes. This matches up perfectly with style not ``solidify[ing] for years as {\twelveit your} style, {\twelveit your} voice,'' albeit disappointing my inner American {\it I want it now} spirit \zincite{23}. %should ``I want it now'' be in quotes or italicized? Use a better word than despite because that is not what I wanted to say. %style -I haven't found myself as a stylist \zincite{23}. Therefore, I'm in the previous stage---learning to prune, clean, fix my writing \zincite{23}. %I prefer "pruning, cleaning, fixing my writing." Should I change? -Clean writing leads directly to warm style because it's not poisoned with the lack of fluidity endemic to cluttered writing. %feels very much like something I'm including because it sounds pretty, so double check if actually fits; also poisoned and endemic is repetitive -Lack of fluidity refers to both the act of reading---clutter makes ideas less sharp, less clear---but also the act of writing. Writing with clutter in my style ``beefs up'' what my words look like on paper, but it makes it difficult even for me to understand my train of thought when I'm busy writing ``gaudy similes'' and using ``tinseled adjectives'' \zincite{18--19}. Making ideas less sharp is problematic, but worse is the loss of identity behind such a fake and mechanistic facade. ``Style is who you are, [so] you only need to be true to yourself to find it gradually emerging from under the accumulated clutter and debris, growing more distinctive every day'' \zincite{23}. %may be redundant -And this method works, focusing on personal style instead of on hiding behind a preconceived notion of what is good (mostly based on what is common, leading to cliches), because ``ultimately the product that any writer has to sell is not the subject being written about, but who he or she is'' \zincite{5}. %Is this an ending?? +I haven't found my style yet \zincite{23}. Therefore, I'm in the previous stage---learning to prune, clean, and fix my writing \zincite{23}. %I prefer "pruning, cleaning, fixing my writing." Should I change? +Clean writing leads directly to warm style because it's not poisoned with the lack of fluency endemic to cluttered writing. +Lack of fluency refers to both the act of reading---clutter makes ideas less sharp, less clear---but also the act of writing. Writing with clutter in my style ``beefs up'' what my words look like on paper, but it makes it difficult even for me to understand my train of thought when I'm busy writing ``gaudy similes'' and using ``tinseled adjectives'' \zincite{18--19}. Making ideas less sharp is problematic, but worse is the loss of identity behind such a fake and mechanistic facade. ``Style is who you are, [so] you only need to be true to yourself to find it gradually emerging from under the accumulated clutter and debris'' \zincite{23}. %may be redundant +%{Removed for Badness} And this method works, focusing on personal style instead of on hiding behind a preconceived notion of what is good (mostly based on what is common, leading to clich\'es), because ``ultimately the product that any writer has to sell is not the subject being written about, but who he or she is'' \zincite{5}. %Is this an ending?? %clutter All of these issues can be reduced to the one atom of writing: problems. Writing is an analytical process, so the easiest and best way to fit it into my cognition is to recognize it as what it is: a big problem that can be broken down into smaller problems. This also allows active learning to be recognized as practice. ``Whatever it is, it has to be confronted and solved'' \zincite{49}. But therein lies the utility of recognizing problems. %does this fit my style? -They can be solved, and solutions can be learned in two ways: reading other people's good writing, and writing well myself. %conclusion doesn't leave people thinking +They can be solved, and I can learn to in two ways: reading other people's good writing, and writing well myself. %conclusion doesn't leave people thinking %Problems. Maybe this can become a body paragraph, or put this theme more into other paragraphs? %Make statements of qualities clearer -- cgit