From e0955a2b7d5f9a8123e3e25c0d2fcb44c1af0814 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Holden Rohrer Date: Thu, 10 Sep 2020 17:57:53 -0400 Subject: added comments on the essay that was graded --- markley/essayone.tex | 17 +++++++++++++++++ 1 file changed, 17 insertions(+) diff --git a/markley/essayone.tex b/markley/essayone.tex index aafe39b..e36e790 100644 --- a/markley/essayone.tex +++ b/markley/essayone.tex @@ -106,5 +106,22 @@ The hypocritically unhealthy characters of these stories are abnormal, given the implicit assumption that most people follow mores, and they are therefore surprising, difficult to explain, and ``strange.'' +% Original comments on essay +\iffalse +This essay is well written. I think you have some organizational issues. +You tend to separate the set up of your evidence from the evidence and +analysis. You need to refer to the uneven u lecture or PPT. Think about +it this way: you want to introduce your topic sentence, explaining what +text you will cite from and what you want to direct the reader's +attention to in that passage. Then you explain the passage itself: +Utterson says x here. Then the passage. From there, you always need to +give analytic statements that explain what the passage means, what you +think it means and how it relates to concepts like the strange, and then +finally how this helps you to define strange as you say "a +contradiction." I think your thesis is interesting, but it would have +been even better if you could link somehow the idea of contradiction +directly to the idea of health I asked you to address. +\fi + \printbibliography \end{document} -- cgit