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From: Holden Rohrer
Date: Wed, 2 Dec 2020 12:52:56 -0500
Subject: wrote versions of everything
cover essay is very partial (needs 1200 words) and the reading response
essays are limited in the analysis
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Introduction
+
This artifact includes three reading response essays and revision
+activities corresponding to each one on different structural strategies.
+The Reading Response Essays assess critical thinking and rhetoric by
+asking questions about "health" through the books we read in class.
+Health is a set of social ideals generally designed as "preventive
+medicine" but deeply influenced by the culture that created them.
+The reading response essays (without revision activity updates) are
+listed below along with the corresponding revision activities
+
+
+
Reading Response Essay One
+
Prompt:The Strange Case of Dr. Jekyll and Mr.
+Hyde, as the title indicates, refers to Dr. Jekyll’s experiments,
+behavior, and transformation as "strange." Likewise, The Sign of Four
+ends with a chapter entitled "The Strange Story of Jonathan Small."
+Explain what "strange" means in these two texts, using direct quotations
+from both texts, references to historical context, and ideas we have
+discussed about "health" to support your argument.
+
+
Uneven-U
+
The Uneven U asks me to choose two paragraphs and look at each
+sentence to see how "abstracted" it is from a direct quote up to a
+general statement about health.
+I commented on each sentence and then rewrote both of the paragraphs I
+chose to get a desired "somewhat abstract to most concrete to very
+abstract" curve.
+
+
Reading Response Essay Two
+
Prompt: Claude Bernard defines the experiment as "an
+observation induced with an object of control." Discuss how
+experimentation relates to the social ideal of health. Use direct
+evidence from The Island of Dr. Moreau and Medical Apartheid, historical
+context, and ideas about health to support your argument. You may
+include examples from other texts we have read, but your primary focus
+should be the readings from the past two weeks.
+
+
Reverse Outline
+
This is about creating an outline from what I've already written that
+tells the main argument: the main idea and how a given paragraph
+advances the central argument is enough to tell when a paragraph's
+message is muddled, which is the point of this argument.
+I have continued to focus on this cohesiveness within a paragraph in my
+writing because of this activity.
+
+
+
Reading Response Essay Three
+
Prompt: In the first lecture on health, I discussed
+how new technologies that help to measure and perceive the the "health"
+of the human body create new rules, regulations, and norms that govern
+"health." Using either "The Yellow Wallpaper" or The Immortal Life
+of Henrietta Lacks explain how new technologies, treatments, or
+ideas for measuring "health" lead to new rules, regulations, and norms.
+I strongly encourage you to refer back to the first lecture to help you
+consider this relationship between technology and health.
+
+
Active Voice Revision Activity
+
This revision activity asks students to review their third essay for
+sentences written in passive voice and change them to active voice.
+This makes the writing more clear and correct.
+This one is pretty simple, so I want to keep up avoiding passive voice
+in my future writing.
+
+
+
Goals
+
These assignments ask students to develop a strong academic
+ argument about how health and other social constructions like
+ experiments or technology relate.
+ Developing these ideas is part of the
+
+ Critical Thinking learning outcome, in the sense that they
+ require analysis of the indirect statements literature makes, like
+ Jonathan Small's "strangeness" referring to his nonconformance with
+ social norms.
+
+
Purpose
+
This assignment asks students to write a formal essay about
+ health and readings related to ideas about health.
+
+
Audience
+
The audience for these is a general academic audience, who is
+ very familiar with the course material, including the variety of
+ concepts of health.
+ Because the audience should already understand the basics I don't
+ include explanations of health and try to avoid book summaries.
+ However, niche terms with potentially multiple meanings are defined
+ if used, like "scientific racism" or "evolutionary Darwinism."
+
+
+
Dr. Markley or a general academic reader. more formal than blog
+ posts. designed to be practice with argumentative writing.
+
Design for Medium
+
The essay isn't very "multimodal," squarely occupying the
+ "Writing" communication mode, and it's formal writing at that.
+ This requires a fairly consistent structure, in the MLA format and
+ in the organization.
+ The MLA format is the 12pt, double-spaced Times New Roman required
+ of most standard essays, and there is the single MLA8 citation
+ standard.
+ This is because the essays lean heavily on direct quotes from the
+ pieces we're analyzing, so the regimented page number references are
+ useful to an academic reader wanting more context.
+ Structurally, these essays fit a pretty standard academic essay---an
+ introduction, conclusion, and body paragraphs divided up by their
+ topic.
+ As the revision activities show, this structure is somewhat flexible
+ (i.e. can be done poorly), but the organization matters, and I can
+ improve it by paying attention to whether each paragraph makes a
+ convincing point towards the central argument.
+ I usually don't do outlining when I'm writing, but I think I am
+ going to use the reverse outline to compensate for my rambling
+ tendencies.
+
+
Revision
+
Particularly in the first reading response essay, I struggled
+ with organizing my ideas.
+ Despite a coherent thesis that I still believe, I tried to
+ incorporate different information that did not correspond with my
+ argument (or at least I didn't develop how it did).
+ My mention of Holmes's cocaine addiction is not well-addressed or
+ contextualized in terms of Jonathan Smalls, but it seems to relate
+ to the idea of health, so I decided to include it.
+ Ideas like that could probably be trimmed down and replaced.
+ My paragraphs in the first reading response essay also don't follow
+ Uneven-U very well.
+ If I repair the sentence order to fully develop the central argument
+ about contradiction, they will probably come off as more insightful
+ than they are now, with a quote (the lowest level of abstraction)
+ as the second-to-last sentence.
+ The revision activities helped me to see what exactly "poorly
+ organized" refers to and how paragraphs can be deliberately
+ constructed rather than accumulate ideas based on topic.
+