From 38897357f20b4a03424473ff3c74d3cfa70be2cb Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Holden Rohrer
Date: Sun, 23 Aug 2020 14:22:31 -0400
Subject: more revisions
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@@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ My Presentation
Hi, I'm Holden Rohrer.
I'm a Dual Enrollment student at Georgia Tech from Centennial High
School in Roswell, Georgia.
-This year, I'm looking forward to taking Dr Markley's English 1102
+This year, I'm taking Dr Markley's English 1102
focused on Medicine and Medical Instrumentation.
I expect to utilise each of the WOVEN methods, but I believe I will
@@ -41,11 +41,14 @@ While I can develop my ideas exhaustively in long form written or oral
communication, I often have trouble compressing ideas.
This is clearest in visual communication most because images' or videos'
visual design permit little explicit information.
-This type of quality is also less tangible, so I've been guilty of
+This modality is also less tangible, so I've been guilty of
ignoring it, deferring to content instead.
This results in presentationworthy but boring templated or
black-and-white visuals.
+For example, in 10th grade, I presented a very dense and offputting,
+black-and-white PowerPoint template-based science fair poster
-This year, I plan to deliberately focus on the visual flexibility of the
-Wordpress reading journal's design and content to improve my sense for
-how readers view it, at first glance and while using it.
+This year, I want to deliberately focus on the visual flexibility that
+the Wordpress reading journal's design and content offer to improve my
+sense for how it impacts readers, particularly from an aesthetic
+standpoint.
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