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diff --git a/markley/portfolio/01_first_week_video.html b/markley/portfolio/01_first_week_video.html
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--- a/markley/portfolio/01_first_week_video.html
+++ b/markley/portfolio/01_first_week_video.html
@@ -1,4 +1,5 @@
-<h4>Introduction:</h4>
+<!--Title: First-Week Video-->
+<h2>Introduction:</h2>
 <p>This video is a short (1m30s) personal introduction and a discussion
 of which element of WOVEN I expect to struggle most with in this course.
 I expect to struggle with visual communication more than the other
@@ -6,81 +7,92 @@ forms, which will manifest in several places but will probably have the
 most significant effects on videos or the blog design.
 This video also includes how I plan to develop my skills with this
 modality (I plan to focus on design and aesthetics of presentation).</p>
+<h3>First-Week Video</h3>
 <iframe src="https://player.vimeo.com/video/450699415"
 allowfullscreen="" width="640" height="360" frameborder="0"></iframe>
 <dl>
     <dd>Goals</dd>
         <dt>Through this assignment, I familiarized myself with the
         WOVEN elements and set a goal for self-improvement throughout
-        the course. I also worked on video production and presentation,
-        to practice some of these elements. I expect to target this in
-        assignments throughout the course. I also better understand the
-        value of targeting multiple types of communication for rhetoric
-        and in different works. This assignment was also directed
-        towards the course material, and I better understand the
-        assignments that we will be doing throughout the course (like
-        the reading journal or final video project) because I will
-        probably want to put extra effort into using the visual and
-        design aspect of my content effectively. The reading journal,
-        especially, will benefit from extra design work.</dt>
+        the course.
+        I also worked on video production and presentation, to practice
+        some of these elements.
+        I expect to target this in assignments throughout the course.
+        I also better understand the value of targeting multiple types
+        of communication for rhetoric and in different works.
+        This assignment was also directed towards the course material,
+        and I better understand the assignments that we will be doing
+        throughout the course (like the reading journal or final video
+        project) because I will probably want to put extra effort into
+        using the visual and design aspect of my content effectively.
+        The reading journal, especially, will benefit from extra design
+        work.</dt>
     <dd>Purpose/Prompt</dd>
         <dt>This video includes a short introduction to me, including my
         name, "major," and hometown and the theme of this course (health
-        as a social construct) and the teacher (Dr. Markley). The
-        First-Week Video asks about a potential struggle with WOVEN
+        as a social construct) and the teacher (Dr. Markley).
+        The First-Week Video asks about a potential struggle with WOVEN
         based on previous experience with trying to communicate in the
-        medium. In addition to previous experience with the medium, the
+        medium.
+        In addition to previous experience with the medium, the
         assignment asked me to develop a goal and a way to reach that
-        goal based on that previous experience. I did this by talking
-        about a focus on revision and the specific component of graphic
-        design, but I didn't match these with previous experience. I
-        could have talked about better, simpler presentations I've made
-        on topics I've known more about, where I can tell most of the
-        story and the graphics were improved through a couple of rounds
-        of revision, based on the content.</dt>
+        goal based on that previous experience.
+        I did this by talking about a focus on revision and the specific
+        component of graphic design, but I didn't match these with
+        previous experience.
+        I could have talked about better, simpler presentations I've
+        made on topics I've known more about, where I can tell most of
+        the story and the graphics were improved through a couple of
+        rounds of revision, based on the content.</dt>
     <dd>Audience</dd>
         <dt>The audience is faculty members and other first-year
         students who are familiar with WOVEN, this assignment, and the
-        objectives of the course in general, like rhetoric. Because of
-        this familiarity with the objective, I explicitly connected the
-        visual mode to my difficulty with speaking briefly, but I tried
-        not to overexplain the mode or visual design. However, I did
-        give my personal experience of how the need for brevity and
-        dense language collide. PowerPoints and posters are my most
-        common interactions with the visual mode, and my audience should
-        be familiar with both. However, I barely included one anecdotal
-        example under the time constraints, possibly because I explained
-        too abstractly: I could have talked about a revision or the
-        impact of a poor design and better shown my point about brevity
-        and still had time to talk about the digital reading journal.
+        objectives of the course in general, like rhetoric.
+        Because of this familiarity with the objective, I explicitly
+        connected the visual mode to my difficulty with speaking
+        briefly, but I tried not to overexplain the mode or visual
+        design.
+        However, I did give my personal experience of how the need for
+        brevity and dense language collide.
+        PowerPoints and posters are my most common interactions with the
+        visual mode, and my audience should be familiar with both.
+        However, I barely included one anecdotal example under the time
+        constraints, possibly because I explained too abstractly: I
+        could have talked about a revision or the impact of a poor
+        design and better shown my point about brevity and still had
+        time to talk about the digital reading journal.
         </dt>
     <dd>Design for Medium</dd>
-        <dt>Because this is a video, I focused on engagement. For
-        content, I wrote out a script that I would read, rehearse, and
-        edit down into. I used a high-jumpcut vlog style to make the
-        video seem more energetic, and I tried to keep my voice upbeat
-        because my voice is the primary content in this style. I chose
-        not to use another production style like a time-lapse or
+        <dt>Because this is a video, I focused on engagement.
+        For content, I wrote out a script that I would read, rehearse,
+        and edit down into.
+        I used a high-jumpcut vlog style to make the video seem more
+        energetic, and I tried to keep my voice upbeat because my voice
+        is the primary content in this style.
+        I chose not to use another production style like a time-lapse or
         slideshow because I think my image and a direct explanation of
         my ideas is important and best delivered talking straight to the
-        camera. I included music (the instrumental of White Town's Your
-        Woman) because I think that it better covers up breaks in
-        talking and maintains a central element throughout the video. I
-        did try to keep it quiet relative to me talking because the
+        camera.
+        I included music (the instrumental of White Town's Your Woman)
+        because I think that it better covers up breaks in talking and
+        maintains a central element throughout the video.
+        I did try to keep it quiet relative to me talking because the
         music itself is unimportant.</dt>
     <dd>Revision</dd><!--The most important question-->
         <dt>Another type of video may have fit my argument better, but
         given the style I chose, the video could have been improved on
-        the script and on the presentation. The script could have
-        been much more personal by extending the anecdote and possibly
-        including a visual representation for the product I created. I
-        also probably should have chosen music not under copyright, and
-        possibly faded it out at the beginning and in at the end. For
-        the final product, cutting away to an image might have made it
-        more engaging. The way I filmed it could also be improved: I
-        held the camera, so it shook a bit, and I read the script for
-        part of the video. If I had mostly memorized the script and
-        propped up the camera to get a single shot between cuts and
-        to stabilize it, the video would probably feel higher quality.
+        the script and on the presentation.
+        The script could have been much more personal by extending the
+        anecdote and possibly including a visual representation for the
+        product I created.
+        I also probably should have chosen music not under copyright,
+        and possibly faded it out at the beginning and in at the end.
+        For the final product, cutting away to an image might have made
+        it more engaging.
+        The way I filmed it could also be improved: I held the camera,
+        so it shook a bit, and I read the script for part of the video.
+        If I had mostly memorized the script and propped up the camera
+        to get a single shot between cuts and to stabilize it, the video
+        would probably feel higher quality.
         </dt>
 </dl>