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+Revision Activity on the first reading response essay
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+Paragraph one
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+``The man trampled calmly over the child’s body and left her screaming
+on the ground...it was like some damned Juggernaut...[on the check was]
+a name at least very well known and often printed.''
+    Direct evidence because of quotation. Might be better as more
+separate statements.
+
+Utterson is originally alarmed by the clear disconnect between Jekyll's
+upstanding reputation and Hyde's immoral and unhealthy nature.
+    Analytic statement. Doesn't directly correspond to the quote, but
+the story motivates Utterson's fear.
+
+He believes their link to be because Hyde is coercing Jekyll, which is
+why he repeatedly interviews Jekyll, but, as revealed later in the book,
+Hyde is Jekyll, and Jekyll is being entirely honest when he shuts down
+the line of questioning with ``My position is a very strange---a very
+strange one.''
+    Argument for why this quote and Hyde's behavior so disturb Utterson.
+
+The case would be less strange if it were chronologically revealed from
+Dr. Jekyll's perspective because, although supernatural in nature, none
+of the apparent sinister contradictions would be contradictions.
+    Argument/so what. Doesn't perfectly connect to the course theme of
+health but argues about moral contradiction and how the
+story-telling affected the reader's view.
+
+The introduction was used to get down to this level of abstraction, but
+there isn't really a concrete statement about why I'm listing these
+specific quotes at the beginning. A link to health from a perspective
+about moral and social standing is certainly possible, but I missed it.
+This should probably be constructed as an argument about the more
+general genre leading into the quote as evidence of reason behind the
+fear.
+
+Strangeness is in the eye of the beholder, and Stevenson presents his
+story in a specific format to build this sense.
+Mr. Utterson plays the role of the audience to the tale of Jekyll and
+Hyde, and his fear of Hyde's immorality harming his friend Jekyll
+develops the sense of strangeness.
+The assumed health of Dr. Jekyll contradicts with unscrupulous dealings
+with an unscrupulous man whom Mr. Utterson is shown the true nature of
+in the talk with his friend.
+``The man trampled calmly over the child’s body and left her screaming
+on the ground...it was like some damned Juggernaut''
+He believes their link to be coercion, which makes it even more bizarre
+when he learns that the upstanding citizen Jekyll is dealing entirely
+voluntarily with Hyde.
+Dr. Jekyll's chronological perspective would be less strange because he,
+in his letter declares himself as a less intrinsically healthy and moral
+man, so his adventures with Hyde would be less surprising.
+
+
+
+Both of these cases are really rather similar in that they contrast the
+immoral with the moral to form a ``strange'' contradiction.
+    So what: tries to connect the two stories by weaving this thread of
+morality and immorality defining strangeness.
+
+While the modern sense of morality has strayed from the explicit
+condemnation of vice, the Victorian morality that these stories apply is
+in no way implicit.
+    So what: continues talking about why these stories use morality in
+such a culture-specific way, mostly molded by concerns about vices.
+
+Health is tied to morality, and morality is tied to restraint from vice.
+    Argument: tries to connect the behavior of characters in the stories
+to the contradiction of morality and immorality as well as vices.
+
+Despite Holmes's cocaine's use to show his dedication, Watson
+appealing to Holmes's sense of better nature (i.e. health/morality)
+shows that vice, although casually accepted, is frowned upon.
+    Analytic statement
+
+Jekyll's attitude to vice shows this sort of casual distaste:
+``My life [had been] nine-tenths a life of effort, virtue,  and
+control''
+    Direct evidence
+
+The conflation of health and morality is evidenced in Watson's pleading,
+``it is a pathological and morbid process...why should you, for a
+mere passing pleasure, risk the loss of those great powers with which
+you have been endowed?''
+    Direct evidence
+
+Mr. Hyde emphasizes the belief that immorality implies unhealthfulness.
+    Analytic statement
+
+``Edward  Hyde,  alone  in the ranks of mankind, was pure evil,''
+which is why he is unhealthy and ``gives a strong feeling of
+deformity.''
+    Direct evidence
+
+The hypocritically unhealthy characters of these stories are abnormal,
+given the implicit assumption that most people follow mores, and they
+are therefore surprising, difficult to explain, and ``strange.''
+    Argument: continues to construct an argument about the strange and
+the abnormal but doesn't connect it back to anything with teeth or
+establish an absolute connection from immorality to strangeness and
+health.
+
+
+
+Health is tied to morality, and morality, especially under the Victorian
+moral system, is restraint from vice.
+Despite Holmes using cocaine to show his dedication to work, Watson
+appealing to Holmes's sense of better nature (i.e. health/morality)
+shows that vice, although casually accepted, is frowned upon.
+The conflation of health and morality is evidenced in Watson's pleading,
+``it is a pathological and morbid process...why should you, for a
+mere passing pleasure, risk the loss of those great powers with which
+you have been endowed?''
+``Edward  Hyde,  alone  in the ranks of mankind, was pure evil,''
+which is why he is unhealthy and ``gives a strong feeling of
+deformity.''
+Mr. Hyde emphasizes the belief that immorality implies unhealthfulness.
+Jekyll and Sherlock, with their indulgence, feel guilt as part of the
+social expectation of moral health, so they are not particularly strange
+in and of themselves, despite the immoral actions they take part in.
+Hyde and Smalls, however, appal the people they interact with, and when
+this immorality interacts with standard mores, they are surprising and
+strange.