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-To design the experiment and understand the organisms' underlying
+To design the experiment and understand the underlying
 behaviors that might affect it, extensive background research was
 required---specifically on the spatial distribution patterns of
 antlions. First, a previous study analyzing the spatial patterning and
 structure of termite mounds in an African savanna was examined to better
 understand the procedure of the experiment. This study examined how
 different termite colonies in the African savanna positioned themselves
-in relation to one another and uncovered that termite mounds maintain
+concerning one another and uncovered that termite mounds maintain
 relatively constant distance from one another, creating uniform hexagons
 of termite mounds through the savannah.  Furthermore, this study
 uncovered that termite mounds must maintain a constant distance from
 each other to prevent conflict between termite colonies, limiting the
-species' success. These results helped guide and shape the study that
-was conducted by providing insight into the possible intraspecies
-competition that could result from close antlion contact, leading to the
-prediction that antlions would have to space themselves in order to
+species' success. These results helped guide and shape the study
+by providing insight into the possible intraspecies competition that
+could result from close antlion contact, leading to 
+the prediction that antlions would have to space themselves to
 prevent competition for food.  Lastly, this study determined that a
 change in available space could affect the spatial patterns of termites
 as well as their behavior, which was later used in designing the
 conducted experiment.
 
 Next, several studies regarding the anatomy and behavior of antlions
-were used in order to better understand the insects. These studies
-determined that antlions stay in their larva form, in which they make
+were examined to better understand the insects. These studies
+determined that antlions stay in their larva form, during which they make
 pits, for 6-8 weeks and develop slower when exposed to less food. This
 helped determine the timeline of the experiment and determine the
-intervals at which the antlions would be fed, as in order to keep
+intervals at which the antlions would be fed, as to keep
 results consistent the antlions would have to be the same throughout the
 course of the experiment, which would require the participating antlions
-to be fed less in order to stay in their larva stage to make pits.
+to be fed less to stay in their larva stage to make pits.
 Furthermore, these studies examined terms such as pit depth and width as
 well as the feeding patterns and behaviors of antlions, which became
-crucial areas of study throughout the experiment, as these studies
+crucial areas of study throughout the experiment, as this
 determined that pit depth and width can signify the dominance and
 success of antlion settlement. This helped determine dependent variables
 to examine over the course of the study.  Finally, these studies
-determined that antlions have a tendency to cannibalize each other in
+claimed that antlions tend to cannibalize each other in
 times of food shortage and significant competition. This provided
-another dependent variable to track over time and examine as size
+another dependent variable to track over time and examine as the size
 decreased, as cannibalized antlions were unsuccessfully metabolized and
 evident in pits.
 
@@ -53,16 +53,16 @@ results and spatial patterns, helping further perfect and standardize
 the procedure, as well as provide a better understanding of antlions
 behavior patterns. These studies provided a better understanding of
 antlion settlement patterns and gave a guideline for what to expect as
-trials continued. Finally, these studies provided scientific procedures
+trials continued. These studies also provided scientific procedures
 that could be tested and confirmed throughout the experiment, allowing
-for a source to cross-check results and procedures in order to perfect
+for a source to cross-check results and procedures to perfect
 the procedure of the experiment.
 
-Finally, in order to effectively conduct a follow up examination of the
-nations spatial patterns and distributions the previous years research
+Finally, to effectively conduct a follow-up examination of the
+nations spatial patterns and distributions the previous year's research
 and results was thoroughly examined. This examination helped provide
 information on the most effective procedure, materials, and dependent
-variables to measure, as the previous years notes were used to improve
+variables to measure, as the previous year's notes were used to improve
 upon the preexisting examination process.  Along with this the
 examination of the previous years teachers clearly illustrated that the
 rate of cannibalism and the average pit depth and width were correlated
@@ -70,7 +70,7 @@ with the size of the enclosure of the antlions, as the rate of
 cannibalism increased as the enclosure decreased in size while the pit
 depth and width decreased as the enclosure decreased in size. This
 distinction helped illustrate the natural patterns of the organisms and
-allowed for the clear development of a follow up experiment, as the
+allowed for the clear development of a follow-up experiment, as the
 examination of the initial trial developed a clear natural pattern that
 could be examined through the introduction of other various
 environmental stimuli. Based on this analysis, the emergent property of
@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@ communication, as prior research revealed that insect larvae lack
 secretion glands for communication and proper vocal anatomy. The lack of
 a mode of communication but the presence of a clear spatial pattern lead
 to the development of the question of how the organisms were able to
-arrange themselves in such an intricate pattern, and prompted the follow
-up study to examine how the organisms were able to distribute in such an
-organized fashion by either identifying a mode of communication or
-determining that the distribution was due to simple mathematics.
+arrange themselves in such an intricate pattern and prompted the
+follow-up study to examine how the organisms were able to distribute in
+such an organized fashion by either identifying a mode of communication
+or determining that the distribution was due to simple mathematics.