the final (I hope) edit of the portfolio

Good fucking night

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@@ -85,8 +85,21 @@ Thinking, and Process (reuse language from common policies page)-->
     social norms.
     </dd>
 <dt>Purpose</dt>
-    <dd>This assignment asks students to write a formal essay about
-    health and readings related to ideas about health.
+    <dd>Each essay asks students to write a formal argument about health
+    and readings related to ideas about health.
+    These essays are artifacts, demonstrating a trained interpretation
+    of the stories in terms of health, and continuing to develop
+    understanding of medicine and the social ideal.
+    Then, the revision assignments corresponding to each reading
+    response encourage improvement in an iterative revision on the
+    structural elements of the essay.
+    The Uneven-U is about improving the paragraph structure, the Reverse
+    Outline the overall structure of the essay, and the Active Voice
+    activity is for individual sentences' structure.
+    This type of format writing is standard in academia, so it's
+    valuable to develop the skill of catering to the standard, but it
+    also provides for more consistent revision processes because of the
+    consistency.
     </dd>
 <dt>Audience</dt>
     <dd>The audience for these is a general academic audience, who is
@@ -95,11 +108,7 @@ Thinking, and Process (reuse language from common policies page)-->
     Because the audience should already understand the basics I don't
     include explanations of health and try to avoid book summaries.
     However, niche terms with potentially multiple meanings are defined
-    if used, like "scientific racism" or "evolutionary Darwinism."
-
-    </dd>
-    <dd>Dr. Markley or a general academic reader. more formal than blog
-    posts. designed to be practice with argumentative writing.</dd>
+    if used, like "scientific racism" or "evolutionary Darwinism."</dd>
 <dt>Design for Medium</dt>
     <dd>The essay isn't very "multimodal," squarely occupying the
     "Writing" communication mode, and it's formal writing at that.